nightbird: Mucha illustration, young peasant holding scythe and grain (abstract functions)
noctilucent ([personal profile] nightbird) wrote in [community profile] writerstorm 2009-11-24 03:11 pm (UTC)

It sounds like a really neat story! (And I'm from southeastern Ohio, so I totally perked up when I saw the detail about Fox.)

It sounds like unconsciously you're really resisting the idea of dropping exposition in conversation, and rightly so. You might try reframing Fox as more of an observer than an interviewer. Readers can take a little bit of "okay, we're catching you up with talking heads," but it's much more interesting to watch action or just plain interaction. Even if all the details don't come pouring out all at once, they'll watch with the POV character long enough and start to figure it out, which is part of the fun. We're also much more engaged with Fox if she's not just absorbing everything, but actively working to deduce the rules.

Does Fox have a guide who knows the world? A sort of "Stick with me, kid" character might be able to help her navigate the new rules of the universe without making everyone explain themselves. Inhabiting the world is going to reveal a lot more than explaining it.

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