I'd been starting to say "no, I have to keep that first chapter because ___!" And now I can't think of any reason I couldn't get rid of it, or at least combine them.
I'm thinking now that in the first scene, WG isn't just there bumping around and asking her stuff, he's there to pick her up--"Hey, you read cards for a certain guy? My boss wants to talk to you. Get in the car, we're going into town." To which she says, of course, "oh hell no, weirdo." He leaves his card and splits.
Then the Hounds shows up a chapter or two later, and they tell her that yeah, she'd just better stay out of this if she knows what's good for her. And that with the vision she had, if I keep it, is what motivates her to call WG up and ask for a meeting so he or his boss or whoever can explain to her what's going on.
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Date: 2009-08-21 05:09 am (UTC)I'm thinking now that in the first scene, WG isn't just there bumping around and asking her stuff, he's there to pick her up--"Hey, you read cards for a certain guy? My boss wants to talk to you. Get in the car, we're going into town." To which she says, of course, "oh hell no, weirdo." He leaves his card and splits.
Then the Hounds shows up a chapter or two later, and they tell her that yeah, she'd just better stay out of this if she knows what's good for her. And that with the vision she had, if I keep it, is what motivates her to call WG up and ask for a meeting so he or his boss or whoever can explain to her what's going on.